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[lainie!]

Okay, so that's not the first page, but I like it =]

Clicky Click =]

[bring the funk, caitlin.]

Ah, i love the whole mythical look. ;] Just a small tip; try Prnt Screening your pictures so that way you won't have those small blurry things on the edges of the person or any where else. Don't know how to do this? It's okay, i'll teach you. Just PM me and i'd be happy to. :} But as for now, i'm off to read your story! <33

[walk it out jessica.]

Alright, I didn`t really have a chance to read it read it, but I did skim through it.
Characters Well, as far as I could tell - there was no dialog, but the characters did seem a bit bland {their facial structure} and maybe sprucing them up a bit and changing some things will make them more unique and such.
CoverAww come on! Heehee, covers are da bomb yo`! They simply draw more attention to your story when a simmer is skimming the exchange and goes "ooh. whats this -click" ya know what I`m saying? You could always request one in the edit me board! :]
StorylineI think its really nice that you really loved Greenlady`s idea, but don`t do everything exactly as she did - make sure to change things or else people might consider you copying her. But it is actually really sweet, the idea in general.
MechanicsAs said, I wasn`t able to read it read it so I didn`t know if you had any mistakes, but its always best to write in word or Microsoft works or something and have a proofreader, then copy & paste into the sims` album {PM me if you need any help with this.}

But honestly, it was really cute and such. I`m sure in no time, with a little work, it`ll be a five stars story! :]

[lainie!]

I like it the way it is, thanks guys.

It's gonna be different, it's just that I liked the whole planet thing so I used the same rituals and stuff. But I did add and extra 'd' to like.

And there is dialogue, actually, so....

Well, yeah.

[sunsetsites]

It's basically the same as what everyone else said. The pictures are fine, but I think it would be a good idea to add interesting covers, otherwise, not too many people are gonna bother reading it.
And as long as the plot is different, it's fine. Yeah....nice job! =]